[off topic]

Isaac Asimov was a professional writer long before he entered his doctorate program. When he was writing his thesis he was advised to try to make it sound like it had been written by a chemist and not an author.

To practice 'scientific' style writing he wrote a comic piece.

The Endochronic Properties of Resublimated
Thiotimoline

https://cdn.jsdelivr.net/gh/ezgranet/mywebsite/docs/thiotim-latex.pdf

When he went for his orals, the last question was to explain the exact nature of Thiotimoline.

No matter how bad the writing was, this is not a good thesis supervisor! It's funny to read the sassy reply, but I'd hate this professor...

Even doctoral students are still students and are there to learn.

A better review would have been something like "There are severe issues with the structure of the text" and then refer to an external resource on technical writing...

You forgot to blur out a fairly distinctive name.

I'm now worried that OP is running a social experiment on us to determine how long it takes a community to realize they supported the wrong side based on superficial and one sided reporting

Ok we get it, stop posting these