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[–] 16 points 2 days ago (5 children)

Ackshually, since it doesn't contain a seasonal reference, that is technically not a haiku but a senryū!

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  • [–] 9 points 2 days ago

    English haiku don't follow the Japanese rules because a bunch of them rely on language features that don't exist in English. The haiku structure taught in western schools isn't a form actual poets use often.

    Wiki has some examples of English haiku that dont follow the 5-7-5 syllable pattern, nor reference to season, but still capture the essence of expressing an abstract thought with minimal language by presenting two short unlinked statements. The last lines of these poems arent explicitly connected to the first two. The reader is left to speculate on the link between them.

    old home
    the light we’d leave
    on, off

    beam by beam
    the old barn taken down
    to sky

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  • [–] 6 points 2 days ago

    I think we can do better than that, even if any such effort is wasted on him.

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