(I was unsure whether to pluralize hydra or not, as I worried it may steer the prompt too much. As it is, I fear mentioning real-world history (even if it is mythological history) puts a bit too much of a boundary around it.)

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[–] [S] 3 points 3 weeks ago (2 children)

Damn, what a haunting tale. I like the take on a zombie story, it's not often I see any that aren't the normal undead, and the twist at the end just makes the whole thing. Thanks for writing <3

Typos &c:

If they’re are killed once fully turned

said something like “she knew my mother’s name.”

To be honest I’m not 100% certain on all the rules regarding quotes but the normal would be a comma leading into it and the first letter capitalized for an instance like this.

where we’d supplement their dwindling staff by doing grunt work for our meals and a place safe from the hydra.

I just tripped up on the latter portion of this sentence, and I think it would read better if it were something like “doing grunt work in exchange for”; maybe that’s just a me problem.

I see the hydra before I hear its quite but constant mumbling,

Hmm, yes, quite. :P

If the hydra dies while I’m stuck her recovering so close to it,

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  • [–] 3 points 3 weeks ago (1 child)

    Thanks, I'm terrible about editing my own work. I know what it's supposed to say so my eyes gloss right over it.

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  • [–] [S] 2 points 3 weeks ago

    Happens to all of us. I've heard it helps to have your work read aloud (whether that be reading it yourself or some text-to-speech) because something about the different pathways helps your brain catch mistakes better, but I'm terrible about ever doing that, either. Not that I've been in the habit of writing for a long while [sad violin noises].

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