Give me feedback you cowards!

I wrote this a little before the climate dread actually got me. Didn't touch it for a while and did some editing over the past day.

I don't like that the poem feels hopelesness, I don't want to sell hopelessness in hopeless times. I eventually recovered from the episode so there is a semi hopeful ending there. I just don't know what to write.

Please tell me what you like, dislike or how it made you feel

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[–] 2 points 1 month ago

Four bold lines kinda looks like four panels… first line is worry, second line is getting closer…. someone seeing someone else in the third… dead person in the last panel…

Is this loss?

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