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[–] 4 points 6 months ago* (last edited 6 months ago) (3 children)

This is great but that line about unborn children is so jarring and feels out of place. I wonder what the intended feeling was for that line.

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  • [–] 2 points 6 months ago

    Yeah that threw me as well, though I do really enjoy the possibly unintended rhyme between it and the following line. I feel like just about any other analogy would fit better in its place, but thinking about it now that also might've been the idea behind it- those jarring, unwanted thoughts that pop into a peaceful reverie and send you downstairs to start the coffee.

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