A man was hit and killed on the 210 Freeway on Thursday as he tried to flee federal agents raiding a Home Depot in Monrovia, CA.

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[–] 2 points 1 year ago (5 children)

Very California hed. "The 210 Freeway" vs. I-210. The AP Style issues with that single sentence in the body are enough to make me twitchy. Setting aside that mess, the time element is in the wrong place (should be after "killed" to avoid that unpleasant "on" after what for some reason is being treated as a proper noun).

Then we have the absurdity of the state abbreviation. First of all, if it's in the same state, you don't use it at all. If for whatever reason you feel the need to in your local coverage area, postal codes are never indicated.

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  • [–] 1 point 1 year ago (2 children)

    It made me wince too. But right now, the article's headline says:

    ‘It just breaks my heart.’ Death of man fleeing immigration raid at Home Depot sparks anger, grief

    Was it different before (it says "Updated Aug. 15"), or is it heavily edited in this post?

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  • [–] 2 points 1 year ago* (1 child)

    I went with the published hed at time of post. Maybe an editor at LAT is secretly on Beehaw?

    I really don't have the energy to research right now, but if we've hit the point that a folo is being presented as a rewrite, we're squarely in Ministry of Truth territory, which is abhorrent.

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  • [–] 1 point 1 year ago

    Could be. Don't worry anyway, we've been in Ministry of Truth territory since the moment news outlets started going online. I've checked on Archive.org, and the only snapshot is from after the update, so... yes, that's the world we live in 🤷

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