When I was young and tried to get dates on tinder I tried to come up with a carefully thought out opening line for every match. That hardly worked and probably had the opposite effect. Once I started to just don't give a shit, and ask directly if they would like to meet for a beer, coffee, bowling or something I got quite a few dates.

If I couldn't get a date planned within the first few messages, or the second day after matching, I just moved on. A lot of people are just interested in validation and are not really interested in meeting up.

This guy's message is a bit edgy, but at least he's straight to the point. She probably ignored him, and he just moved on.